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Comment on We are a Family!~ by ssissaba

ssissaba — Mon, 13 Oct 2008 07:27:21 +0000

hey terry

Really great picture, i think it makes your writing look better. Not that it isn’t good, because it is.
Your first sentence is wrong you wrote “Family are a group” it can also be Families ARE a group.

Edited by: Saba

Comment on We are a Family!~ by ssistevent

ssistevent — Wed, 08 Oct 2008 03:01:02 +0000

what’s up
We come in peace….this is Steven and Kevin, we are here to edit your page.
Do not freak out

First of all we think that you should put your paragraph on the right side of your blog next to the picture.

“that knew each other for thier whole life” Ok change it to “that have known each other for THEIR ENTIRE LIFE”

“They understand each other and cheer each other back.” I think you should change cheer each other back into back each other up because that sound better and is easier to read

Dude, i love the family guy picture.
Peace
OUT

Comment on We are a Family!~ by ssisnickt

ssisnickt — Wed, 08 Oct 2008 03:00:37 +0000

Sup terry, -D It’s me Nick and TONY [balony]
we’re commenting on yours as the last one we comment in this day [October 8th]
Tony will be talking shortly, and ill copy your background picture of Sparta >:D
har har har >:D you can’t do anything about it,
har har har >:D

Tony:
hi terrrrrrrrray so impressive to read wat is family is about. very interesting.~~~!!!
ps- can u tell jaise to not use maple sim too much? seem like usinig toooooMUCH

Nick:
Another typo by Tony Balony…
Can’t blame him
I BEST AT SCOUT IN SA, WEEEE
My laptop broke down yes-yesterday [6th Oct]
Now i am offline for 48 hrs…
Soz
I also have virus in my USB, so if u wan it, tell me =D
BTW, I won’t copy ur Sparta thingy bachigy

Comment on We are a Family!~ by ssiscindy

ssiscindy — Wed, 08 Oct 2008 02:47:10 +0000

the text is really touching & great. But… You might consider making the page smaller.

Comment on Cyber Bullying by ssiscindy

ssiscindy — Wed, 08 Oct 2008 02:44:57 +0000

but the second one… woaw. shocked, that’s all i can say.
the mother should be ashamed for what she did. it’s murder. .___.

Comment on Cyber Bullying by ssiscindy

ssiscindy — Wed, 08 Oct 2008 02:42:45 +0000

the first quote was not fun at all. i think that it’s pretty much immature who ever the cyber-bullying girl was.

Comment on We are a Family!~ by ssisclarad

ssisclarad — Wed, 08 Oct 2008 02:42:16 +0000

OOh! and also your picture should be a little smaller and your post would look better if your text was next to the picture.

Comment on Want Ad. by ssiscindy

ssiscindy — Wed, 08 Oct 2008 02:39:13 +0000

the text is really cool & convincing. But it’s a bit short & you could have mentioned the reason they would want to find a new land.

Comment on We are a Family!~ by ssisclarad

ssisclarad — Wed, 08 Oct 2008 02:38:14 +0000

hey Terry!!
this is Grace and Clara… we’re editing your page

Ok so your first sentence is wrong you wrote “Family are a group” it should be “Family is a group” cause you wrote family in a singular form. and on your first sentence you wrote thier its their. “that knew each other for thier whole life or know them very well” is an awkward phase.
“and cheer each other back” delete the back.

Other than that it’s pretty good

Comment on Columbus Glogster by ssiscindy

ssiscindy — Wed, 08 Oct 2008 02:35:18 +0000

the texts are a bit small. i can’t read it. :\